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 |  | Chasm  [E] A hiker finds herself at rock bottom.  |
| Hello KingsSideCastle! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . This was a good story. You did an excellent job using the prompt. I found it inspiring and true to life.  You may want to put a third genre. Maybe Suspense. Many people look up items to read just by using the genres search bar. This may help more people find your piece. It's also good to have all three genres if your item gets chosen for a Quill. The Title and Description - Perfect title. It goes great with your story. The description caught my attention and urged me to read on. Well done! The Storyline/Plot - A woman who lives by herself falls into a deep hole while hiking. She's not expecting anyone to come looking for her, and she doesn't see a way out. She's about sixty feet from the top. The Characters - You do a good job in such a short story by letting us get to know your character. The Setting - It would be nice to have a little more of the setting of where she's hiking. It would give the readers a bit more of her harrowing situation. What I Liked Best - The overall message of the story. The hallucinating. Below are a few minor suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit,  one of turnsone of the turns  Eventually she forced A Comma is needed after Eventually  was a hiker not A comma is needed after hiker  At first sheA comma is needed after first  her in disappoint, her in disappointment,  to be be Thanks so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it.  Intuey"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister  The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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