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 | Under the sea  [E] born 2005/01/24 Age:15  |
| (5.0)   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   Greetings, Solosan! I am reviewing this because today is your 18th WdC Anniversary.  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked Wow. I could actually feel myself relax, like I was floating among the waving seaweed, suspended in a world of colorful coral and fish, the colors of a rainbow. I feel the calm, hear the silence, and gaze at the mysteries as peace replaces fear and anxieties. Oh, your words are so lovely, so calming. If I listed all my favorite lines, I'd include the entire poem, so I'll only highlight a few:Suspended in this fae world The current washing my fears away Sea weeds wave at me, Moving languidly and at ease, Suggestions/Comments to ConsiderI really have no suggestions. This is so beautifully written, if there were any typos, they went unnoticed.  Actually, I do have one thought for you to consider. An option, perhaps. I noticed that each line begins with a capitalized letter. You might try uncapping a few of those letters for flow. Here's one example:Now: I can find peace there, Where whales sing. In the calm deep blue, Option: I can find peace there, where whales sing. in the calm deep blue, Anyhow, just a suggestion.  Final ThoughtsYour visuals are amazing and your words are therapeutic as they float along so smoothly. Thank you for sharing! Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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