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I Don’t See The Juncos, Anymore Open in new Window. [E]
Publisher's Pick in the 2014 WDC Anthology.
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I love a good nature poem, and this captures the essence of everything I look for. You have the metaphorical descriptions of the scenery, the winter snows and the flighty charm of the little birds.

Your free verse flows smoothly down through the narrative, and the words bring it to life in a true poetic fashion. We can see your love for the juncos in the caring way you've fed them over the winter and the way you think so fondly of them. Yet you hardly realized their absence until you thought you caught a glimpse of them at the Florida feeder. Such is the way of life... We don't realize how much we miss something until we look for it and it isn't there.

The lines are well balanced and easy to read. I would recommend gathering the Wikipedia quote into a dropnote for tidiness, and you can underline the title header.

As a free verse, autobiographical poem, I don't have much to suggest. I'm laidback about poetry rules and structure, as being too lazy to bother with meter and syllable counts myself. Certainly I'm not qualified to advise anyone about those things *Laugh*

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Heartg*

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