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 Shadow Over July Open in new Window. [13+]
A taste of memory lane alongside an unsteady future.
by Gaby Author Icon
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A brief and simple poem we have here, lightly worded with just enough to convey the visuals of a hot and fleeting summer vacation.

We don't need much to envision the scenes, since it's such a universal experience.

You've juxtaposed reasons why people might dislike summer and especially that particular moment of their experience with the reasons why such a moment should be precious. We can sense the child enjoying themselves and realize how important it is to live in the moment and appreciate what we've been given.

The free verse flows well and is easy to read. I like how brief it is. In only 49 words you've packed a lot of imagery.

I'm laidback when it comes to poetry... I say that I prefer writing free verse, but lately I've found myself writing with rhyme and presumably some kind of structure more often, as with the Nurse poem for Kiya. But I'd be at a loss to pin down any kind of "scientific" basis for what I write. I disregard rules of structure and form, going mostly by instinct.

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