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 I Remember You Open in new Window. [13+]
To Every Veteran
by Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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My name is Angelica, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: I Remember You

First Impression: The speaker remembers a time when you were in a Navy outfit coming home from Desert Storm. Also remembers a time you faced a college of every veteran the speaker has ever known. Also remembers a time when you had a face of "Grand Uncle Roy" who refusing talk of mustard gas in France. Also remembers father who served in Army Corps in World War II. Also remembers John writing poems about Vietnam. So many veterans remembered here. This poem honors them all. It is simple with one line that repeats in the first of a stanza. It is like a wave even though directed at remembering one person.

Great details in few words. Remembering something about the veteran and more veterans along the way. There is a lot to learn from from each of them. It fits the contest nicely. Things happen and time passes by and the speaker remembers these things. It was as if the actions was present when really it was in the past. Nice natural voice. The repetition gives a strong point. The speaker remembers you. It's a happy moment to meet you coming home from active duty.

What needs your attention: No spelling or grammar errors found.

What part I liked best: The repetition of the first line and then a fact given about you the speaker remembers. Good word choice.

Overall impression: I enjoyed reading this poem. There were facts about veterans that stood out. All for remembering one veteran, multiple veterans came into mind. Fits the contest theme nicely. Veterans is a prompt used. This poem is patriotic and honored veterans well. There is few words to describe all that they do for us. This captures that nicely. Good job and keep up the good work!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

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