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 The Black Fur Coat  Open in new Window. [E]
A short story about transformation as possession, and unleashing the animal in all of us.
by Shika/Noah Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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What a cool story. I wasn't sure what to expect, but you've written it tastefully and with the assurance that this is a good thing happening to Sammy. He escapes the confines of what is probably a dull and boring life, and releases traits that are almost superhuman except for the fact that they're subhuman... One wonders what became of his higher reasoning, thoughts and human feelings.

We see his characteristics slowly changing from human into some sort of animal, and it was interesting trying to guess what type. I was thinking perhaps a fox until the feline aspects became obvious. An interesting thing about cats, is they eat only meat. They're unable to eat anything else. Dogs, on the other hand, are categorized as omnivores. I was surprised to learn this, as I grew up assuming dogs only ate meat as well and wondering why dog food has so much "human" stuff in it, like carrots and cheese and grains.

It reads clearly and builds up well. I don't have a lot to recommend; perhaps you could run it through Grammarly, because I did see a couple of sentences that felt kind of awkward, though I couldn't tell you exactly why. (Guess that's not very helpful *Laugh*)

Great work here, with several layers of meaning. I look forward to seeing what else you might have for us.

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