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 | Flood  [E] This poem is about betrayal and anger.  |
  This is a "Game of Thrones" review!Hello, eveandthetree!  Overall Impression:This vivid portrayal resonates deeply on an emotional level and captures the overwhelming nature of such feelings. It feels very personal and intimate. Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:The structure of your poem, with its deliberate line breaks, effectively mirrors the escalating nature of the emotions it describes. The rhythm of the poem has a build-up and release of tension, much like a flood itself. Your choice of words displays the raw emotions you describe very effectively. A suggestion might be to consider the consistency of the poem's cadence to enhance the natural flow. However, the current setup does add a sense of chaos and unpredictability, aligning well with the theme of emotional upheaval. Content:Your poem does an excellent job of conveying the dynamics of betrayal and the resultant anger. The metaphor of a flood is not only apt but vividly executed, allowing the reader to feel the swell of emotions alongside the speaker and demonstrating the destructive force as I believe you intended. Grammar and Mechanics:I did not find much in the way of spelling or grammar concerns. One minor point is the apostrophe in "forcing it's presence" which should be "its presence" to denote possession rather than a contraction. The lack of punctuation suits the narrator's chaotic anger in general. It suggests a speed of speech that is either very slow or very pressured, depending on how the reader interprets how anger sounds. Final Thoughts:Your poem effectively depicts an all-too-human experience of emotional turmoil. I'm sure it will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your work with us! JayNaNoOhNo   My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim" The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and, therefore, do not necessarily reflect the group, activity, and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.
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You responded to this review 04/17/2024 @ 7:10pm EDT