Greetings Joy !

I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of Thrones" . I especially visited your port to dig your most precious gems then this piece appeared. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:


"When Mama Wrote" paints a vivid picture of a woman grappling with the desire to express herself creatively while being tethered to the practicality of reality. The poem utilizes strong metaphors to depict this inner conflict. Mama's words are likened to "plastic shopping bags in flight," initially carefree but ultimately vulnerable to the wind's whims. The roller coaster ride symbolizes her exhilarating exploration of emotions, yet the "shrieks of joy" hint at a slight nervousness, an unwillingness to fully expose herself.

The poem cleverly uses contrasting imagery to highlight this struggle. "Reality" is portrayed as "symmetrical and compact," a stark comparison to the wild ride of imagination. Paperweights, typically grounding objects, represent the forces that hold Mama back. Despite these constraints, the "undertones of desire" and the "reeling lines" reveal the powerful urge for creative release.

The final stanza beautifully captures the emotional connection between Mama and the speaker, presumably her child. Here, the poem transcends a simple exploration of creativity and delves into the power of art to forge connections. The child craves Mama's approval, waving back and clinging to the fleeting warmth of her creative expression. The image of the "chant" suggests a shared language, a secret joy passed down between them. It's a subtle but powerful moment, hinting at a legacy of creativity being nurtured. The poem ends on a hopeful note, with Mama's creative fire burning brightly "inside the hearts that hold her joy." This final line expands the poem's scope beyond the individual experience. Mama's art transcends the page, finding a home in the hearts of those who appreciate it, suggesting a ripple effect of inspiration.

Overall, "When Mama Wrote" is a touching exploration of the creative spirit's battle with self-doubt, the power of art to forge connections, and the potential for creative expression to leave a lasting impact. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic