Greetings Joy !

I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of Thrones" . I especially visited your port to dig your most precious gems then this piece appeared. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:


The poem "On Crabapple Beach" unfolds like a meditation on impermanence and the search for meaning amidst the vastness of existence. The speaker, standing alone on the beach, observes the fleeting presence of summer through the sand slipping between their toes. The ocean, with its potential for coolness and even drowning, becomes a metaphor for the anxieties inherent in being alive in a world that is constantly shifting.

In contrast to the speaker's solitude, the illuminated beach houses symbolize domesticity and a sense of connection. The domestic details – steaming soup, simple flowers, and embracing lovers – all hint at a comfort the speaker seems to yearn for. The slender volumes of verse visible through the windows introduce the possibility of solace found in creative expression, perhaps suggesting a path for the speaker to discover their own voice.

The poem then shifts into a personal memory, recalling a childhood experience of writing the first line of a poem on this very same Crabapple Beach. This act is framed as a lifelong commitment to using words to explore and express emotions. The power of this memory stands out even more because it's contrasted with the harsh realities of the approaching winter. The imagery of the earth moving beneath the writer's feet and icicles forming in the sand underscores the poem's central theme of impermanence, highlighting the ever-changing nature of life and the world around us.

On a deeper level, the poem grapples with the tension between impermanence and the desire for connection. The summer crowds who desert the beach and the impermanent nature of the sandcastles they build reflect the fleeting nature of human connection. The speaker observes the domestic scenes within the beach houses, a symbol of potential connection and stability, yet remains outside, unable to fully participate. The memory of the childhood commitment to poetry offers a glimmer of hope, suggesting that the speaker may find solace and a sense of permanence through creative expression.

Best regards,
Gervic