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Stare-master Open in new Window. [E]
Balance in life; a purpose for exercising = coffee + unlimited donuts WITH sprinkles !
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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First impression:

The title appears to be a play on words for Stairmaster, a popular piece of exercise equipment. The intro line reads like a t-account where both sides have to be equal. As I am currently in my second accounting class, I find that presentation very appealing.

What works:

Just then, 'whang,' he hit a diagonal cable that braced a telephone pole! *Right* This literally had me laugh out loud sitting right here at my computer. I can see him so clearly and that moment of Karma getting him was pure comedy gold.

What needs work:

staring at a chick across the street *Right* I can see who Mr. Macho Adonis would think of a woman like that, but since the story is told from your point of view, you have to consider if you want to represent yourself like the kind of man who thinks of women in demeaning terms.

Final thoughts:

This story, whether fiction or reality, is one of those big city moments that could totally happen. I saw that you mention another story at the bottom. You should link to it so that readers who come by can easily toggle over to the other story.

This was a very amusing read. I hope you got lots of laughs during your open mic readings. Those super chiseled humans are definitely in the minority with most of us fitting into the "jogging is dangerous" mindset. The best part in this story is that nothing but the man's dignity were bruised. It wouldn't be funny had he been seriously injured.

Annette
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