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Stream Open in new Window. [E]
The stream in winter, and after.
by PiriPica Author Icon
Review of Stream  Open in new Window.
Review by JayNaNoOhNo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is a "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window. review!


Hello, PiriPica!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This poem elegantly captures the duality of existence—static yet ever-moving, restrained yet boundlessly free—mirroring the complexities of human emotions and life transitions.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
Free verse suits the theme of natural, unhindered transformation. The absence of a rigid structure allows the words and lines to flow like the stream it describes, meandering and finding its path naturally. The rhythm and cadence of the poem are controlled yet organic, with effective line breaks and pauses that emphasize the dual states of ice and water.

*Checkb*Content:
The poem is rich with symbolism and deep metaphorical significance. As the poem progresses to describe the thaw, there is a palpable sense of release and renewal. This transition not only represents a seasonal change but also serves as a powerful metaphor for personal or emotional revival and the complexities that come with it.

By paralleling the seasonal transformation of a stream with the internal changes within oneself, you achieve a resonant and reflective piece that encourages readers to consider their own evolutions. This poem is both a celebration of the new and a contemplative look at the past, capturing the beauty and fear intertwined.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
The choice of words appears at first to be simple, but their selection and placement are intentional. Each term reinforces the imagery and emotional weight of the stream’s transformation.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This is a lovely poem. The interplay of fear and wonder in the face of change is compelling, making this an engaging and thought-provoking read.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

JayNaNoOhNo Author Icon*Smile*


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