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Game of Thrones 2024: House Mormont Open in new Window. [13+]
My story and poem entries for WDC's 2024 GoT challenge.
by Elizabeth Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Road Less TraveledOpen in new Window.
Review by JayNaNoOhNo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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This is a "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window. review!



Hello, Elizabeth!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
The story's focus on the emotional and practical challenges of the protagonists adds a poignant layer to the thrilling plot.

*Checkb*Title and Description:


*Checkb*Hook and plot:
The story begins with a personal struggle with clothing, an everyday concern that quickly escalates into a life-or-death survival scenario. This effectively hooks the reader by juxtaposing the mundane with the catastrophic. The plot unfolds with a steady pace, maintaining tension and suspense as Giannine and Freya venture into the unknown, their mission fraught with physical and emotional trials.

*Checkb*Characters and dialogue:
This gripping tale blends survival drama with horror and adventure elements, creating an atmospheric narrative that explores resilience and camaraderie in the face of overwhelming odds. Giannine and Freya are well-rounded characters with distinct personalities and backgrounds that influence their actions and interactions. The dialogue is realistic and serves to reveal character depths and the evolving relationship between the two women, reflecting their mutual dependency and differing viewpoints.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
You've effectively used descriptive language to enhance the setting and mood without overwhelming the reader with excessive detail. The grammar and punctuation are solid and don't cause any distractions.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
The story is thought-provoking and emotionally resonant. It encourages reflection on what it means to strive against despair and the value of taking risks for the possibility of a better future. It should appeal to many readers of the genre, who will appreciate the thread of hope in a dystopian setting.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

JayNaNoOhNo Author Icon*Smile*



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