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Mutiny Open in new Window. [E]
There's a mutiny afoot.
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Review of Mutiny by Anni Pon Author Icon

This is both clever and impressive. A clever idea to liken the experience to an entire crew arguing over the set of the ship, and impressive in keeping the metaphor consistent throughout. And I absolutely love this:

First-mate Right Eye lied,
"I've seen too much, what's left?"

It's so appropriate and made delicious by the fact he lied.

There are reasons to quibble, I grant you. The rhymes break down occasionally and more attention needs to be given to meter, if the poem is to be read smoothly. But the whole thing is such fun that I can forgive anything. If we think of it as free verse that mutinies with rhyme sometimes, then it's perfectly acceptable. So much is done with poetry these days that the basic structure and consistency of vision is more than enough to carry it through.

In the end, it's how effective is the poem that matters. And this one is an absolute mindblast. The idea is brilliant and its performance quite stunning. I was going to give it four stars thanks to the lumpy meter but, on thinking about it, I admit that it's a personal attachment to meter that is influencing me in this. So it deserves five stars for a wonderful, exhilarating tour de force of vision. Truly enjoyable.

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