Hi Chrys O'Shea -

This is a "Game of Thrones"  review for House Martell.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinions and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: I chose this piece because I needed to do some reviews for the Game of Thrones challenge, so I went to the "Please Review" page.

My opinion of said story/poem: Okay, I'm still laughing. This should have been done years ago. Wile E. Coyote was never the sharpest tool in the shed though.

You would think, after each and every failure, that he would have found somewhere else to get his equipment/toys. Or, at least, have Acme put them together for him, money appears to be no object after all.

I really enjoyed how you mixed in real-world items/people to advance the story. Especially the addition of the Home Depot, which not only makes a great replacement for equipment and such but the idea that they may be having a change of heart ties in nicely with the story.

I liked the addition of Judge Judy, but, I don't think you captured her essence. The verdict was short and concise, with not enough information as to the why she ruled the way she did. Such as, you could have said that the coyote has a long history of failure, whereas the Acme company does not. Or you could have presented an example of Wile E. not properly reading or following instructions. Pointing out either of those would have greatly increased the Judge's credibility.

Conclusion: I found no spelling errors to trip up the tongue. The action and descriptions helped the story move along at a good pace, keeping the reader interested until the end. Well done!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina




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