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 |  | A Robin and a Rose  [E] Caring for God's creation  |
| (4.5)| Hallo Amethyst Snow Angel ! I will be reviewing your work "A Robin and a Rose" for House Targaryen on behalf of "Game of Thrones"  Content: This is a short story that deals with the relationship between a mother, her son, a rose and a bird, and how all of this ties into a greater life lesson for them. Pluses: It's always tricky jumping into reading stories that deal with faith and religion without it fearing it becomes too 'preachy'. That's the last thing you want to do as a writer, especially if hoping to get an important message across. You were able to do that quite well with this story. It's a tale of finding hope when all seems lost and that was translated in the way the mother compared her problems to the rose and her son's reaction to Rob (their bird's) decision to remain with them. Although you don't dwell too much on the description of the settings, we are still able to get a sense of who our characters are and their personalities through the dialogue. While Katy is a loving mother, there's still an undertone of weariness thanks to all the other problems she's having to deal with. Gardening, and her son, seem to be a safe refuge away from that. She also seems to pour all her hopes into the flower, that's barely a flower (or as her son considers it a runt), until it blossoms at the end of the story. And let's not forget the touching section where they find the injured bird and nurse it back to health. That, too, is another representation of how their family can heal from whatever problems they're going through. It's something Aaron is able to articulate quite well (and I had to go back to read just how old he is because that was quite an adult insight into the situation).   Thanks for the inspirational story. It was a pleasure to read, and keep on writing!   Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/16/2024 @ 11:26pm EDT