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A short poem inspired my the music "Everywhere" by Fleetwood Mac
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Hi Emerick

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: In All I Do

First Impression: The author did a four stanza with aabb rhyming pattern that doesn't feel forced. It flows smoothly from stanza to stanza. Romance is definitely your wheel house. Hopefully, your taking advantage of all the writing opportunities in The North Remembers.

What needs your attention: There are no punctuation or grammar issues. It's a free-style poem with an end rhyme pattern that the author has worked to his advantage.

What part I liked best: The opening two lines introduces the reader to the narrator and his love interest. The next two indicate they've got a connection the narrator values. In the next stanza there appears not everything is going as the narrator desires and friends are concerned. The narrator realizes love is like a beacon of light. In the final stanza the narrator realizes that together anything is possible. A beautiful tribute to love.

Overall impression: The cadence in the poem works. The rhyming feels natural. The poem tells a story from the beginning to the end. I enjoyed the poem very much.

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