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Motherhood Open in new Window. [ASR]
A glimpse... perhaps not the one most people see.
by Sarah Rae Author Icon
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Review by StephBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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*Reading* THE STORY

A raw, gritty look at the emotional toll motherhood can take on the psyche.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

While not necessarily a heartwarming read, the vinyette focuses on places a majority of mothers have been, that raw, gritty place that has them facing their actions and wondering is it enough? And it's in these moments that we find our inner courage and strength to continue one task at a time.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by the narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked; "Tears fell into her pillow, silent tears she only shed at night when she knew nobody would see or hear them." -- The description tugs on the emotional heartstrings of the reader.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: quite house at night

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Narrator, mother

Mom is bone tired. Finding inner strength and courage will come slowly at first with small tasks. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits for the story, but can be expanded on to be a tad more reflective of the emotional beats the story produces. The opening engages the reader, who hopes for a positive outcome. A well done, emotional vinyette.

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