"Game of Thrones"  "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 



Hi Angelica

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Activities Entry

First Impression: Curiously missing a lot of entries for the Game Of Thrones that you chose to participate in for the month of April. Is this something you really thought through when you made the commitment.

It's clear to this reader that the author's interest lies in poetry because of the numerous entries.

What needs your attention: Obviously, the lack of writing is what jumps out first. The second is the amount of invalid entries.

What part I liked best: The Road Less Traveled Entry about Lily taking the road less traveled was an enjoyable read. It's so true not simply following the masses and to do the right thing as Lily did with the cow. She made the owner happy his cow was safe and in turn he promised to give her something she missed out because of her act of kindness.

Overall impression: The writing I see in this journal is sporadic and doesn't reflect what the other members of her team are doing and this concerns me. I'm unsure as to what the author thought the games were going to be like and how much writing was actually involved.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Sorry if this review feels harsh but I'm truly wondering why you wanted to participate in the GOT?