Greetings Beholden !

I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of Thrones" . I especially visited your port to dig your most precious gems then this piece appeared. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:


"Oh To Be Young Again" offers a scathing portrayal of a character trapped in a state of arrested development. The poem utilizes short, clipped sentences that mirror the speaker's petulant tone. The constant refrain of "don't tell me" acts as a shield, deflecting any attempt at guidance or consequence.

This character craves victimhood, fabricating a "pinching" incident to elicit sympathy. This manufactured plight underscores their need for immediate attention and a deep sense of entitlement, blatantly admitted through lines like "I don't think that it matters / if all my thoughts are scattered."

Their manipulative tactics are further exposed through references to being the "darling daughter" and demands for what they're "oughta" get. They deflect blame by claiming they merely spread rumors they heard, portraying themself as a powerless pawn. This victim narrative crumbles under scrutiny, revealing a cunning attempt to control the situation.

The final lines paint a disturbing picture of stunted maturity. The speaker flippantly dismisses the country's state with "dross," showcasing an alarming lack of understanding or concern for the bigger picture. Their childish declaration of identifying as "so young I'm trendified" exposes a desperate attempt to cling to a bygone era. The poem ends with a sarcastic "love you lots," a parting shot that drips with insincerity and leaves the reader with a lingering sense of the speaker's manipulative core and their resolute refusal to accept responsibility. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic