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Hi Sandra Happy Anniversary

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Over My Dead Body

First Impression: Wow, I've said a lot of those expressions myself. I'm particularly fond of I have nine lives like a cat. I'm always telling my husband that I'm one of the cats. And when my sons were home I would say over my dead body more times than I can count.

What needs your attention: My only recommendation is to use white space in your favor. In between paragraphs gives the reader the opportunity to pause and absorb. As it is makes the reader feel like they have to keep going.

What part I liked best: What a delightful surprise on the headstone. Yup, I think Mom scored the last word big time. I don't see anyway for her daughter to top that. Except maybe having pigs fly over the graveside service.

Overall impression: This was an funny and sad story all bundled nicely together. The pacing worked very well. The mom and daughter's relationship felt natural.

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