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Unfinished Open in new Window. [E]
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by Anni Pon Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I noticed this on the Online Authors sidebar and assumed it must be a work in progress. Not sure why I clicked on it, but I see I was proven wrong.

This is quite a poem, tossing out words of confusion and loss in a mysterious, surreal, lyrical manner reminiscent of some of my favorite music by U2 or Imagine Dragons. I love the cleverness of the last line, where the word “unfinished” is left off… we see that the relationship is unfinished as well, and we assume it is because the other party has passed away.

You’ve structured and formatted it well, and included a line count. Perhaps you would like to submit it to either "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. or "Shadows and Light Poetry Contest" Open in new Window., which are both contests for older items without prompt requirements. Oh, I don’t understand why one of the genres is “Entertainment,” as the subject matter seems serious enough. Perhaps “Emotional” would be a better fit.

I have nothing to offer as to structure or form, as I detest measuring meter and counting syllables, preferring to write my poetry mainly by instinct. I know a good one when I see it. I view poetry as a highly subjective art form, and I’m laidback about rules. I can feel the emotions here, and it’s quite good.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *HeartG*

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