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Bubba's Corner BBQ Open in new Window. [E]
A touristy couple are in search of the ultimate BBQ this side o' the Hicks.
by StephBee Author Icon
Review by Choconut Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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What I liked ...

*Bulletr* This made me laugh. A lot. The way you create characters, showing us instantly who they are and what they are like, is a joy to read. Maryann and Stew made me laugh because I could relate to the husband and wife sniping at each other when they have been in the car together for a long time, they are hungry, and they don't know where they are going. Who hasn't been there? I especially loved the way Stew didn't want to ask for directions because he was a man, and, "Men don't ask for directions." I think that's, like, a universal law that is programmed into mens' heads at birth.

*BulletR* The dialogue between the two in the car and Russ and Evie, who Maryann asks for directions, is brilliant. This description of Evie showed me straight away who she was: "The girl’s hair was curly and extra frizzy, and she had a cigarette in her fingers." That is all the description you give, but we know her immediately. I loved the back and forth between Russ and Evie, like they were having a competition to see who could give the best directions. Russ, being the man, thought he could. But, really, it is Evie's directions that help the most.

*BulletR* This made me chuckle: "Russ can’t tell his fork hand from his shootin’ hand." What a great description. I loved how he was quick to accept the money, and then sniffed it.The discussion of Bubba's and how good the food is made me laugh when Russ said they went to Bubba's the previous night, and Evie said, "He’s still fartin’ it off." That is so funny. And then, Maryann and Stew were both worried about which foods gave him the gas. As a Brit, I've heard of collard greens, but I don't really understand what they are. My hubby is American, and whenever I ask him, he just says, "Oh, cooked green vegetables."


Suggestions: Just a couple of typos: "'Okay,' said Evie. He waved her hand ..." It should be "She." Also, "'That way,' said the guy motioned with his hand." I would take out "said."


Parting comments: I enjoyed your story very much. It made me laugh, and you created some fantastic characters. Nice work.


Choconut

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