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Buster Dog and the A-Team Cake ![]() ... half an hour before the birthday guests were to arrive, disaster struck ... ![]() |
Greetings from the House of Mormont! By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones" ![]() ![]() Ah, so we meet again, sir. I was looking under the Family genre and saw your item and knew it would be a good one. An excellent story of a good cake made even better by ingenuity, and “the icing on the cake” is, it’s true ![]() You’ve told the tale in the perfect way; it’s amazing that it’s a real story, because it writes so easily. Everything is there that I might be tempted to harp on: goals, stakes and obstacles; amusing characters including a dog, a granny, a bunch of boys, a clever mom. Your formatting is great, and there’s nothing at all I can see to change. Perhaps a word count at the top would be helpful, but as I’ve been browsing the genres lately I’ve learned how to do a long press on the items on my iPad to pop up the little section with an approximate word count before I open it. (All I have to access WdC with is an iPad and two Android phones… you’d be surprised at how much can be done here on a phone. And did you know that iOS snubs Comic Sans font, substituting a ridiculously formal and almost indecipherable font called Snell Roundhand? Don’t mind me, it’s just a pet peeve…) Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing ![]() The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. ![]() ![]() "The WDC Angel Army" ![]() ![]() ![]()
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