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 |  | Burned  [13+] She was hot on the trail of the arsonsist, but was she getting too close....?  |
| "When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. Hello Scott Joseph! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . Good mystery story of a woman tracking an arsonist. When they meet up he is not ready for what is about to happen. He's used to intimidation working. Not with this one, though.The Storyline/Plot - Very creative story with creative storytelling. You do a wonderful job bringing the story together and giving the reader a twist they didn't see coming. Great job! The Title and Description - Good title that drew my attention, and an excellent description that urged me to read on. The Characters - You do a wonderful job with dialog, and letting your readers get to know your characters. We quickly learn what kind of people they are, on the surface and deeper down. The Setting - Nice job with description and detail. I was easily able to envision each scene as I read. What I Liked Best - I liked how you tied up the whole story with the twist at the end. Nicely done! Below are a few suggestions below. Please use or discard them as you see fit.  rain streaked rain-streaked  sweat suit sweatsuit  pockets and startedA Comma is needed after pockets  gallon size gallon-size  silencer equippedsilencer-equiped Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful story. I enjoyed it.  Intuey My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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