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 | GOOD STUFF!  [E] The man has good stuff!-For the tall-tale contest-  |
| (4.5)| GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW This is a review for "GOOD STUFF!" from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  THE STORYDude's wife is really ill, but in the course of the monologue you discover he hasn't quite been the best of husbands to her.  WHAT I LIKEDI was chuckling the whole time I was reading this. Dude has been "too good" to his wife, but we learn he hadn't been good enough.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the first person by the husband. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. DIALOGUEThere's a good blend of dialogue and narration. The dialogue is spot on perfect and hilarious, which drives home the comedy. DESCRIPTIONSI liked: "On our wedding night you stayed up until morning shooting craps with your two buddies in our apartment." It not only sets up a vivid picture in the imagination, but also an emotional one. Don't you want to be with your wife on your wedding night instead of playing craps? SETTINGTIME: modern day PLACE: Dude's home This is something that that is clarified for the reader. Being a monologue, sometimes it's hard to establish time and place, but there's enough established here that helps to sell the story. CHARACTERSHusband Honestly, he's a wreck. A comedic wreak.  MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSI think you have to read the story to see how the title ties-in and it's more of an ironic tie-in. The opening made me laugh and kept me reading. I picture a comic stand-in routine with this vinyette. Thanks for the laughs! Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen  }
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