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Bubba's Corner BBQ Open in new Window. [E]
Trying to give a tourist directions to Bubba's
by 👼intuey Author Icon
Review by NaNoKit Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi 👼intuey Author Icon,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window. [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

Well, this wasn't the easiest prompt to write for. I wondered what you'd do with it, and I have to say that this took quite a creative turn!

A tourist is looking for a particular restaurant. They figure it must be on a corner, because of its name - Bubba's Corner BBQ. Well, it used to be, and the reason for why it isn't there any longer is a well-described scene that could easily belong in a comedy movie - one thing leads to another and everything goes from bad to worse until, yes, one can understand why the restaurant now exists elsewhere. I have to say that I am glad that the old hog is okay! Lucky escape there!

This was a fun read. I could clearly picture the scene. Well done!

Suggestions:

Paragraph 4:

I only have one suggestion, Tracey:

*Snow2* Well, that hog was so spooked when those double doors to Bubba's Corner BBQ opened up, that hog ran right through...

The repetition of 'that hog' stood out to me. Perhaps the second instance can be changed to it?

My Rating:

This is a fun response to a tricky prompt. I enjoyed the read.

I did have one suggestion, but nothing major. For that reason, I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work.

Write on!

Kit

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