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Pink Perfume Open in new Window. [E]
A pink little bottle full of summer aroma
by PiriPica Author Icon
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Review by Maryann Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim*Hi PiriPica! If I can be honest, I was attracted to your item because of the really pretty unicorn ribbon which it has on it. After I clicked on the item, I was glad that I did. At first glance, your presentation made your item look like a fun piece to read. I wasn't disappointed!

LOL I must say that I read the notes at the bottom first, and I smiled when I read that the perfume pictured wasn't meant as a product placement. I did hover over 'here' and saw that it was Clean. Nice use of that feature, by the way. Not too many make use of all the features on our site.

Also in the notes, I didn't realize that June 23rd is National Pink Day.
I'll have to remember that, and I'll think of your lovely poem when I do.

I liked that you gave information about the decuain form of poetry. I like to try structured poems from time to time, but I don't always remember the patterns. Adding a bit about it here will help people to see it in your poem, and understand what you were doing.

The pink font at the bottom as well as inside the poem itself added to the nice presentation.

The look of your poem reminds me of a sonnet, though I knew it is a decuain.

I feel that you succeeded in making your poem seem like a 'pink little bottle full of summer aroma'. I enjoyed reading that, although you have a 'kaleidoscope of memories', summer (in other words) brings back memories of pink.

The narrator says that past memories can easily be recalled when thinking of that pink bottle. I loved the little details that you included, such as pink aromas in the breeze, pink clouds, pink floral fragrances, etc. These thoughts help your readers to see pinkish, too.

One more thing that I'd like to point out is how nicely I felt that you rhymed your words. You did this effortlessly and your poem flowed smoothly because of it. Nice work in putting this unique piece together.


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