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Bubba's Corner BBQ Open in new Window. [E]
Trying to give a tourist directions to Bubba's
by 👼intuey Author Icon
Review by StephBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW

This is a review for "Bubba's Corner BBQ" Open in new Window. from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window.

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*Reading* THE STORY

A local gives a tourist directions to Bubba's Corner BBQ. Better have a receipt and a pen handy to write down where to go!

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the explanation as to why Bubba's wasn't on the corner. A hog got lose and tore through the BBQ, then... ah -- I'll let you check it out for a chuckle or two! It's a good thing I wasn't drinking any coffee at the time. I would have spit it out!

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The dialogue drives the story.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Bubba opened the back door, and it ran squarely into one of those big smokers he had back there." -- Great visual. I could easily picture this happening in my imagination.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: rural setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

The narrator

The narrator is looking for directions, but I don't think they expected the directions they got. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy to read on the eyes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader with the opening question: "Do you think you can tell me how to there from here?" A light read that will make you laugh.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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