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Bubba's Corner BBQ Open in new Window. [E]
Trying to give a tourist directions to Bubba's
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! I was looking for something rated E in the Comedy genre, and your newly minted tale is right on top. I saw the post by Sophy announcing today’s requirements and couldn’t resist seeing how you did.

When the hog made its way into the smoker, I figured that would be the end of the poor fella… I’m glad your comedic saga turned out well for the hog. It’s a quick, rollicking tale that suits the prompt well.

A couple of typos:

~ “of the park. Park your car” the sentences should be joined by a comma.
~ “must of” I’m uncertain of the tone you’re using here; if it’s a hillbilly speaking, it makes sense, but would they really call Bubba’s a tan brick “establishment?” I’m not feeling a strong Southern accent in the native’s speech, and this grammatical slip up is a little jarring. It could just as easily be an English villager speaking, but the idea of Bubba’s BBQ is distinctly Southern US, and perhaps you missed an opportunity to cultivate a stronger regional atmosphere.

Anyway, enough of that. It was a fun story, brief and to the point. Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *HeartG*

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