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Hi Webbie

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Hey, Come Back With My Kid

First Impression: I bet the retelling of that story was the highlight of many a family gathering. I chuckled reading and was reminded of my own children's moments of fame in family conversations.

What needs your attention: Nothing, you're definitely an awesome writer. I hope someday someone says that about my work. We all dreams, don't we?

What part I liked best: The family going to the cable-car office to aid the father in his pursuit of the car with his pre-teen daughter on board. The screaming man on the brink of an aneurysm running behind their car was hilarious. I could envision that in my head as I read it. I actually re-read that paragraph to my husband because he was wondering why I was laughing. I know in the moment it was funny but after the fact it definitely is.


Overall impression: Another fun read about a family excursion that had a mishap that would later become a highlight of strolling down memory lane. The pacing was good and the caharacters were realistic especially the panic-stricken Dad. Kudos for another awesome writing piece.

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What does the Fox say????? 9 of 10


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