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It Happened One Night Open in new Window. [E]
strange encounter in a cabin
by AmyJo-Thankful in heart Author Icon
Review by Choconut Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi AmyJo-Thankful in heart Author Icon,

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What I liked:

*Bulletr* Oh, dear. I decided to read and review this piece because I was intrigued by the brief description. I thought it said, "storage encounter" and I couldn't fathom what that might be *Facepalm* Of course, I see now it says "strange encounter" and that makes so much more sense! But, onto the story. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Your humour really appealed to me. When the narrator is first stranded, and she thinks of heading for an abandoned cabin she saw a little while ago, I thought maybe there might be something, or someone, unpleasant in the cabin. I also worried for the narrator when she fell asleep in the old rocking chair. I was sure something would happen to her. Which, of course, it did. But not something horrible. Something rather lovely.

*BulletR* This story really made me remember my precious dog, Alfie, who we lost last May. I have missed having a dog so much, but my hubby point blank refuses. But, this story reminded me of how funny they are, how loving. This part, in particular, made me yearn: "I felt a warm tongue on my hand." That made me smile. That has to be one of life's greatest pleasures.

*BulletR* This talking dog is clever in so many ways. He knew how to make the breakdown truck stop to help the narrator. He can talk. I mean, come on. That is so cool. I thought it would all be a dream, especially when the dog had disappeared when she awoke the second time. But he was real. He'd gone to get help.


Suggestions: Just a couple of things. Firstly, "Shaking my head, I just pet the dog's head." I would get rid of the two uses of "head" by saying, "I just pet the dog." Also, "without cloud in the sky." I would think it should be "without a cloud."

Parting comments: I have to admit, I'm envious of the person in this story. Okay, so her car gets stuck in a drift, and she has to "hoof" it to the cabin. But, just look at the wonderful rewards she receives for this: a walking, talking, genuinely real dog! Love it!


Choconut

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