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TAKE YOUR PARTING GIFTS ON THE WAY OUT! Open in new Window. [13+]
Raising daughters is no easy task. Be prepared for high drama and laughs along the way.
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥmas Author Icon
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Hi Webbie, wasn't it so sweet of Gaby to inflict your port with all these reviews.

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Taking Your Parting Gifts on the Way Out.

First Impression: I didn't realize you had four daughters. I knew you had children but mentally didn't process daughters. I thought raising one was difficult enough, I can't image four of them. I chuckled at the well planned departing gifts for birthday and Christmas.

What needs your attention: I didn't see anything punctuation or grammar wise but then you know I don't usually look either. I'm here for the read.

What part I liked best: I love the I'll show them mentality as each departed home. Little did they know that was the bigger plan.

I made my children pay 25.00 a week after high school for room and board until they moved out. We gave it back to them and added some to it to cover their rent deposits. And I made darn sure they emptied their rooms. I was so over hard rock posters and black lights.

Overall impression: This reader found this an amusing read about the bigger plan with the author's four daughters. Good job, Webbie.
Being a grandma makes it all worth it.

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