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A young boy needs his dog. Writer's Cramp Winning Entry
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Review by 👼intuey Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Reading* Congratulations on winning the Writer's Cramp with this entry. I can see why it won.

This is a heartwarming story of a boy and his lost dog. Most of us animal lovers have lost a pet sometime in their lives. It's a heart-wrenching experience. You can't sleep or rest until you find them. *Heart*

Title and Description - Your title is simple but fits the story nicely. You should put a brief description of what the story is about. It will help draw more readers to your piece.

Characters - The reader is automatically swept up in the boy's emotions. We can't help but feel for him. His heartbreak is all too palpable. The relationship between the parents and the boy is also written well. Mom and Dad both want to find Skip almost as badly as their son. Even though they may not outwardly show it as much.

Setting - Great job on writing the details and descriptions surrounding the characters. It helped me to envision each scene as I read.

What I Liked Best - The ending of course! I'm a sucker for happy endings. My stories don't always have those. *Think*

Below are a few suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit.

*Bookopen* parent teacher

parent-teacher

*Penw* Usually Skip blasts

Comma needed after Usually

*Notepad* No Mom.

Comma needed after No.

*Books3* vegetable garden some time.

vegetable garden sometime

Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it.

*Heart* Intuey

"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
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