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 | Don’t Look Up  [13+] Charlie was warned but…  |
| Hello Sumojo! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . This was a great flash fiction piece. It's amazing how much detail, description, suspense, and action you were able to write in just three hundred words! Excellent job!Story Line -Poor Charlie is literally on his last leg of life. Hung up, thirsty, and starved half to death, he's awaiting his execution. The crowds are gathering, awaiting the morbid show when a stranger approaches Charlie. Charlie should have remembered that if it's too good to be true, it probably is. Title and Description - A perfect title for this piece, and the description lends the perfect amount of suspense to urge the reader to read on! Characters - Your main character is at his wit's end. He knows who the stranger is who approaches him, but he's too far gone to give it much thought. He agrees with his conditions. Your character's desperation and resignation are clearly felt in your story. Nice job. Setting - The setting is well-written all throughout the story. Your story is filled with details and descriptions that enable me to envision each scene as I read. What I Liked Best - The ending. You did a wonderful job writing the suspense that was carried throughout the story and culminating it in the end.  Below are a few suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit.  In his delirium Comma needed after delirium  Charlie open one crustedCharlie opens one crusted Thanks so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it! Tracey"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/11/2024 @ 10:33pm EDT