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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby ~ Way behind!

"Game of Thrones"  Hello Fellow Writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.Title: Greetings From A Gruesome Gargoyle First Impression: I never expected to be reading about a practical joker cum gargoyle. So, they are not just a pretty gruesome face adorning the walls of ancient buildings? They serve a purpose and this one's reason d'etre is to roam and wreak havoc in the month leading up to Halloween. He seems quite attached if not territorial when it comes to this library. His descriptions of the elderly librarian are quite scathing and mean-spirited. it is a good thing he enjoys reading because he is haunting a good source for books. What needs your attention: I would suggest you shorten some of your sentences in this piece. Yes, as he mentioned , this gargoyle likes to ramble, but run on sentences need not be his prerogative. Often shorter sentences carry more of a punch when describing someone or action. They underscore movement and heighten the tension or the mood."The feisty girl turn on a quick..." Quick what? Do you mean "turn quick"?What part I liked best: I like the gregariousness of this roaming, mischievous gargoyle. He holds nothing back and seems proud of his shenanigans. This story contains humour. too. I loved the allusion to Hannibal with the fava beans and Chianti. It was also amusing that he did not differentiate between a gross book and being engrossed with a book. The point is he enjoys books and he is certainly in the best spot to do that. I can picture that poor octogenarian of a librarian fainting with her "unmentionables" exposed. And an old, antique gargoyle referring to a woman as old? That's rich.Overall Impression: This is a fun story. If I were wandering 'round an ancient library I would keep looking over my shoulder. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure! What does the fox say??? Listen carefully.(1989 characters)DISCLAIMER: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.