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Review #4743386
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Soul Mates Open in new Window. [13+]
Second Place in WDC Inspirational Quote contest.
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Review of Soul Mates  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Wow, what a beautiful and heartfelt “ghost” story that perfectly and literally encapsulates the quote which was the prompt. I loved the happy ending that stymied the stodgy egotistical white coat and his students, and the idea of a “mad scientist” reaching out to his true love who has passed away, through research collaboration, is brilliant and unique.

A minor typo:

~ “Flames peaked from under” the word is “peeked” though perhaps you should choose a more ominous word such as “flickered.”

I always recommend using Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices. You can gather the author’s notes in a dropnote ▼ (just open that up for the rest of the sentence *BigSmile*)
Scene dividers need to be centered, and perhaps stars instead of lines would be a good idea.

Aside from that, I see nothing to change here. It’s a memorable, well crafted story that considers the eternal infinity of love and the vastness of an unknown universe in quiet, personal terms of a man and his soulmate coming together at last.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *HeartG*

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