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 |  | No Good Deed Goes Unpunished  [13+] It is a wonderful feeling to help out a loved one,but, wait to see what happens next.  |
| (5.0)| Hallo Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥmas ! I will be reviewing your work "No Good Deed Goes Unpunished" on behalf of "House Targaryen Points" for "Game of Thrones"  Content: This vignette is a snippet into the writer's trip with her son, to her mother's, for holiday and the shenanigans (if you call it that) that ensued during their stay. Pluses:I have to say, you could write a darn good brochure on places to not visit while driving around New England. Your humorous anecdotes make for a fun read, and you're able to take the reader through the entire trip. It starts off with a warning to the wise - stop being too nice - actually, it's not to discourage anyone from doing good things, but just do them in moderation, I guess.  The trip was a nice enough gesture; to go see Mom and help her clean up the place. Question though, what was the reason for staying in a hotel? Was Mom's home just too cluttered for the extra guests? Or you just didn't want to put a burden on her?Either way, seems like the hotel itself was no five-star wonder either. From your description, it appears the beds were not too comfortable and it was difficult to get enough sleep. That was much needed after all the gruelling hours spent cleaning out Mom's apartment. I could feel your aching joints and muscles - and I've got to say that your boy was a trooper for dealing with it. Not many children would have lasted an entire day let alone several doing such manual labour. He's a gem! With the job finally done, you decide you've overstayed your welcome and choose to bolt from the scene, with your son, back to your nice comfy bed at home. For whatever reason, you decide you need to wash the bed lining, and poof! the machine decides to welcome you back in a most special way. If it wasn't for your son's quick thinking - who knows how much damage would have occurred? Suggestions:Here are a few things I noticed while reading. Please remember that these are only my suggestions/opinions and it's ultimately up to you to choose what works best. Based on true life events, not much I can say in the way of suggestions. Well written all around.    Thanks for sharing and keep on writing!    Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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