Notre Dame in Paris [13+] A letter about a visit to the Notre Dame in Paris |
HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" Hi StephBee . I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Notre Dame in Paris" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story. Overall Impression. I chose your letter particularly because I have visited Paris and seen Notre Dame, first in 1980, and more recently in 2016. My wife and I visiting in 1980 were able to attend an Easter service. Two and a half years after that last visit, Notre Dame had a devastating fire as I'm sure you heard. I'm amazed that only five years later the cathedral is near re-opening. Pictures cannot catch the magnitude and grandeur of the cathedral. My night shot remains one of my favorite pics taken while traveling Europe. Your story is both a travel and a romantic tale. It adds another layer to your reminiscences. You don't really say, but I wonder if your letter is non-fiction. If so, I hope for a favorable outcome of your pending romance. Your writing is very descriptive and a joy to read. I could 'see' in my mind each site that you described allowing those memories of mine to resurface. Technical and Editorial Considerations. I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing here--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. I think 'in' should be 'of'. ... but a local vender explained they were in the kings of Israel and Judea from the Old Testament. I wonder if this should be Montmartre, as in the district and Basilica of the Sacré-Cœure. Café De Montrartre My Rating. 4.5. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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