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Hi Sandra

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Dismissed

First Impression: I agree with Millicent the elderly are dismissed way too often. I know unfortunately first hand after witnessing an accident. The police asked the younger people standing there and walked by me totally ignoring me when I said, officer.

What needs your attention: Nothing other than a pet peeve of mine. I'm not a younger person so I find it challenging to read something that has minimal white space. It would me much easier on older readers if you added a space between paragraphs.

What part I liked best: I have a cat themed purse. That's hilarious. I guess, I'm living up to the old lady imagery. I'm hoping she has a good time with that wad of cash. I thought Officer Goodfellow's name was amusing. Sadly, all the officers behaved just like law enforcement we're accustomed to everyday. They don't listen, they just want everything to be just so and not really solve a crime. (Sorry, I've had some unfortunate mishaps with the police so I'm not fond of them.)

Overall impression: The pacing is good and the characters were believable. The story focused on the scene after the robbery and a good Samaritan who tried to do the right thing but was ignored. Bonus, she got a wad of money for her time.

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What does the Fox say????? 1 yellow case


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .