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The Coffee Monkey Open in new Window. [E]
Morning coffee - served with humor and a little help from the animal kingdom
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Review of The Coffee Monkey  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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An enjoyable, folksy anecdote about your family and the morning coffee routine. I don’t see a whole lot to correct, though perhaps “It was a puppy and we are its first owners,” could be reworded so that the tenses agree. Also, it’s a bit of a ramble… there isn’t a whole lot of “point” to it, as we wonder if it will be a satirical sort of story or simply a lighthearted anecdote. But not all tales have to have a “point…” I guess I’m thinking of the oft-repeated short story triad of “goals, stakes and obstacles,” which doesn’t really apply when telling a “front porch” personal memory. It was fun to read, and I can’t think of anything to say that you should change.

Morning coffee, kids and dogs is a universal and relatable sort of experience, and we can all chuckle at your “training” as a dutiful husband. I’m glad you have a satisfactory marriage. A word count would be nice to have in the subtitle, as this looks like it counts as a “flash” story. Formatting is excellent; perhaps you should underline the title heading.

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