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 |  | The Man They Left Floating  [13+] He knew in his heart they wouldn't just leave him.  |
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  Howdy! Me again.  Just doing another GoT review.  This was an enticing title and intro. Well done! I also see you filled in 3 good genre options, so nicely done there.  Though that means that if this is like the other, I'll be STRUGGLING to find things to improve this piece. You're just a great writer.  "I mean, what? Over an anchor? Okay, I untied your anchor. Did I ever say I knew how to sail?" Holy crap, another awesome comedy!  "In all sincerity, what the hell? I didn't know it was bait. Do they think I would purposely barbecue bait?"  Yikes! Uh, yeah, maybe it was a ruse to not be asked to cook anymore. That would be my private excuse. "Yeah, wave-wave; you see me, the little guy you blamed the fire on? Yeah, here I am!"  What the heck?!? I love how you just throw that in there like it's nothing. Just when we think he's bad enough, there's ANOTHER thing he did. WOW! Yeah, this dude is horrible! (Also, I just realized I didn't check to see if my last review was long enough...  I hope so...?) Anyway, this bit literally had me laughing out loud! That's hilarious! I dated a couple of Navy guys (they weren't in the Navy when I met them, but apparently I was driving them to join for some reason lol) and one thing I learned is that a fire on a boat is very, very bad business!  "And I'm NOT a peeping-tom! I truly resent that! I was just curious. You yacht people do some strange s***." YES! That's hilarious!!! You know, as a reader. It would NOT be funny if I was one of those yacht people. Okay, after reading this, I'm not sure I'd go with Nonsense as a genre. It does make sense. The nonsense things I've read are really hard to track such as "I got a dog called a Rhodesian ridgeback when I when young man, what are you doing?" That's just one example of how nonsense can work, but see how the words start out with one sentence, then morph to another, then another? Yours makes perfect sense. Maybe consider Travel, Transportation, Psychology, Melodrama, Environment, something that's just not Nonsense, IMO.  Mostly, I find nonsense difficult to read and yours was a pleasure. These are all just my opinions. Do what you wish with them, but do keep writing! You've certainly got talent. Thank you for sharing your skill with us!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/08/2024 @ 4:26pm EDT