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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby

"Game of Thrones"  Hello fellow writer! My name is Sandra I am one of the sly foxes. Title: Clandestine Services First Impression: Haha! As I just admitted I chuckled and giggled. This was hilarious. You strung me along with your description of a covert mission, a " black op". Two lone figures skulking in an office of an evening. You tease with allusions to a newbie, and the narrator as being experienced. You hint at an entity, the 'organization" to create a conspiracy. Your surprise reveal of an ending is totally unexpected. Well done! I will admit a surprise birthday celebration could be considered as a "special mission".What needs your attention: Nothing! Why mess with perfection? I understand the word constraints of a Flash Fiction piece and you nailed it here. This succinct story needs nothing else to improve it . I find no glaring 'errors' either. What part I liked best: Everything, no really, truly! I am impressed with your comic delivery. Like a great joke you string the reader along and set the scene to further enhance the surprise punchline. Clandestine indeed. Off the books, eh? Two mystery figures alone to accomplish who knows what? I like that you increase the tension with this 'innocent' line. "This is more complicated than I thought." I am hooked. What? As I already wrote you create the allusion of a spy enterprise, a highly classified need-to-know strike. Nothing as it turns out is being taken or copied or destroyed. Bravo! This is not so much a mystery as a suspense story. Cue the action/thriller ominous music.Overall Impression: This is deftly crafted and I salute you. Thanks for the smile on my face. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. This has been a pleasure! What does the fox say??? Listen carefully. (1852 characters) DISCLAIMER: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only he opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.