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Reflection of the Night  [13+]
Very Short Story About Tolerance Written for W/C Contest 2003
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Hooves

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Reflection of the Night

First Impression: The protagonist looking into the young man's eyes was like going into his soul and in that moment the connection will be cherished for many years ahead. Everyone needs to feel connected with another.

What needs your attention: In the sentence Later I recalled to vivid memory I think in feels better than to. The way it's worded to me sounds awkward.

What part I liked best: the author,and this reader connected with the two souls passing on their journey, for the brief span in each other lives they gave and received what was needed. I'm happy for the young Arab boy he was safe because of the other passenger's silence.

Overall impression: The story's entertaining to read. I saw the author posted the prompt and this reader feels the prompt was fulfilled and then some. The author reminds us all to take leaps of faith for a better world.
It's a sad world we live because people judge others by race, or ethnicity or their life preferences.

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