Hello W.D. Wilcox,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review, and I hope you find this feedback useful. I came across your story, Jo-Jo the Clown through another WDC member, and I enjoyed reading your story very much.

Overall: I thought this story was very entertaining. The set-up in the beginning was excellent. It hooks the reader immediately and keeps their attention until the end. The setting was magnificent and accented Jo Jo perfectly. The POV
in third person was very effective with just enough dialogue to balance the story out without losing the reader.

Plot: This story was about who had snapped due to his own failures in life and becoming a clown he was able to gain access into the lives of people like the ones who had hurt him and take revenge.


Style/Tone: The word choices, sentence structure and figurative language were very effective for the descriptions.


Scene/Setting: The time, place and setting characteristics flowed smoothly and worked well together.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: I saw no issues in this area.


Characters: The characters were well-developed and believable.


Dialogue: The dialogue was well done, authentic and was smooth and easy to follow.


Suggestions: I cannot offer any suggestions because this story was well written.

Write On!
Kristina


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