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Review #4742420
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The Tale of Sir Richard   [18+]
Entry for the November 2023 Humorous Poetry contest. (Winner)
by Dave Ryan
Review by Jayne
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello, Dave Ryan!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This is one of the funniest poems I've read in a long time. Everyone should read it right now.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
The entire structure of this poem fits perfectly with the subject matter (alas, poor Dick, I knew him not). It flows seamlessly from one hysterical moment to the next, barely allowing the reader to catch their breath before bursting out with laughter again.

*Checkb*Content:
Your comedic timing is exceptional. You know how to let a line/stanza rise and fall, hitting the comedic elements exactly where they should be. You've used excellent visuals and concrete words (resplendent is a favorite of mine) to paint the picture of the scene. The reader creates the entire world from the structure and word choices. And, yes, amid the comedy, you manage to tug *Smirk* at our heartstrings with poor old lifeless Dick.

In terms of poetry and content, I have no notes to offer. It's brilliant.

What I can comment on is the description. Think of the description line of your items like a book blurb. Right now, you tell us what it was for and that it won. That's great and worth some bragging rights, but it doesn't tell the reader whether or not they would want to see if they think your poem's a winner. Changing the description into a teaser helps readers decide what they want to pick. Using the Quill image as the cover is a nice touch, but because you don't have a visual that ties directly to the poem, it's even more important to have a description that gets people to click through. And what a treat they're in for when they click!


*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
This is a very polished *Smirk* piece, and whatever edits you have made to the punctuation were done well since I didn't notice anything out of place.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
The TL;dr version of the review: It's brilliant, and I love it.*Smile*

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayne *Smile*


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