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Hi Kenzie0

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: A Calm Voice Over by Stormcloud

First Impression: Toddlers are more energetic than a tornado. The magnitude of what they can accomplish in a short period of time has always surprised me. As a parent and now a grandmother I've experienced a lot of those no moments discussed.

What needs your attention: I'm uncertain as to why the words higlighted add to the scary story.

What part I liked best: The fear the mom felt once she realized where her child was and the struggles involved as the situation unfolded. This reader's heart paused hoping that the child was okay. I can relate to her fear.
I had gone on a trip to visit my grandmother with my two young sons. One carseat in the front and one in the back because my two year old son wouldn't stop poking the 2 momth old brother. I was outside the car with the door open when I asked the 2 year old to pass me a diaper. He said, no. So I walked around the car to get it myself when he unhooked his car seat and reached over to pull the shifting lever on the car. It rolled down the hill between 2 trucks on the road. My sons were not hurt but the trunk of the car was buckled by the house it hit.I tried to get into the car but couldn't. So yeah, I know how in the moment unexplained things happen.

Overall impression: The story was gripping and the pacing was perfect. Thank you for sharing.

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