Hello Sumojo,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review and rate it. I came across your poem, Collage while surfing those who maintain black cases. I enjoyed reading it very much and I hope you find this feedback useful.

I thought the imagery was very well done. You did a wonderful job mixing and showing memories and a mother's love. It was easy for me to visualize an elderly mother looking at old photographs of her children with smiling eyes, and remembering a specific memory of each one.

Your word choices and figurative language was very effective. The words flowed smoothly and it was easy to read. I saw no issues with grammar, spelling, and/or punctuation.

The mood produces an emotional warm feeling for the reader while the tone follows the author's thoughts.

Suggestion: I feel that the title, Collage, and brief description don't quite live up to this piece. While it is your piece and you decide what works, I think one of your lines - 'My love, my life' would make a good description to intrigue the reader to click.

I can not offer any suggestions for improvements because I think the poem is well-written.

Write On!

Kristina

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You responded to this review 04/07/2024 @ 1:52am EDT

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