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 Review #4741741 |
 | Spices, Jerk, and Chili  [E] Junior is happy enough to let Derice lead, but when it comes to chili...  |
| (4.5)| Hi StephBee  This review was written on behalf of House Targaryen as part of "Game of Thrones" ! Disclaimer The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. Why I chose to review this item: This review is in celebration of your WDC account anniversary. These are some of the things I loved about this story:  Oh, my word. This story had me smiling and laughing the whole way through. It is lighthearted and feel-good, and it even has a couple of sweet romances thrown in, to boot. Your first sentence, where you describe the Pismo beach community as "snuggled up" against the California Coast is fantastic! Such a great description. So, right at the start, I was hooked. And I stayed that way until the very last word. I adore Junior. He appears to be a man of few words, but a man who is just kicking back and enjoying life. Until he meets Suzie, his big love in life is chili. Derice, on the other hand, revolves his life around cooking the best jerk chicken known to man. All he wants is to make enough money to open a jerk restaurant, then to marry his sweetheart, Barbie. Derice and Junior open up a food van which, mostly, focusses on Derice's jerk chicken, but also allows for a little of Junior's chili on the side. When they entered the competition for the best restaurant, I kind of wanted Derice to win, but I was happy when Junior took the number one spot. Derice had been quite derogatory towards Junior on several occasions, and he always made out like the chili was inferior to his jerk. So it was satisfying to see Derice knocked off his perch for a while. I thought your introduction of Suzie was perfect. Immediately, we learn that she loves chili, and our senses are thinking ahead because it has to be a sign for Junior. And then Suzie asks for seconds of the chili, and it's obvious she is his lobster. The characters are well described from the beginning. When they start to speak, though, it is wonderful. You have written their accents into the words, and it makes them come alive. I could hear them and see them in their van and on the beach. Suggestions: I have a few grammar / typo suggestions which I will put in a dropnote, so you may read them, or not, as you wish. Grammar / Typo Suggestions ▼ Parting comments: I have enjoyed reading this story. It has made me happy and, also, hungry for chili. Happy account anniversary! Choconut   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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" ...Derice was an honest and well-intentioned boyfriend for their daughter and they got engaged." - There should be a comma before "they got engaged."
You responded to this review 04/04/2024 @ 11:34am EDT