Conduct Becoming [13+] Heavenly help. |
Hi Don! What a pleasant surprise for me - I started reading your poem, and then I realized that it consisted of many stanzas of limericks! I love limericks! To me, they are really lots of fun! I expected a simple, sort of spiritual drama poem. This one, I thought, had the best of both worlds. It told a lesson, and it did it in a fun and unique way. I hope you did well in this contest, and that the judges found this as much of an unexpected gem as I did. You should probably add comedy to the genres! The opening had me cracking up, and the mention of the tram made the little picture in your brief introduction make sense. Also, the ending 'punch line' last stanza about the conductor also explained a lot, and tied nicely into the title of, 'Conduct Becoming'. I thought that worked well with the mention of the conductor. Each limerick stanza had its very own witty charm, and they all flowed together to tell the story of the bully, Graham. We get a good idea that this, Graham, is one bad bully. He obviously has a bad attitude, and picks on people, as when he stole a mans book and sang, "I'm Bad", as he did it. What bad luck he had to have priest and a nun who seemed to tattle on Graham to God. God answered their prayers and put Graham in his place, and now Graham is anew as tame as a lamb. I liked the happy ending, and I also felt that you ended it well by using the same, There once was a bully named Graham, but only now Graham was no longer a bully. Very nicely done. The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. -Write on!
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