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 Sleep Paralysis Open in new Window. [E]
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Hi Tenebris

Happy WDC Anniversary!

My name is Megan, one of the sly foxes.

First Impression: A girl named Cassandra is undergoing a sleep study to try to cure her sleep problems. I underwent an operation and I was on a breathing tube for 6 days and was in a coma state so I was curious and decided to read this. I was curious and chose to read this. I got introduced to Cassandra and decided to read this interesting piece.

What needs your attention: Why is this Doctor putting this woman in a coma when he was supposed to be helping her? He hurt her mother and is evil. I ask what is in it for him to do this to this woman? Some information needed for this part.

What part I liked best: The young girl's anticipation and hopes about trying to develop a good sleeping procedure and her high hopes. Her unsuspecting nature. She is a well rounded character that is trusting her Doctor.

Overall Impression: Well defined with good characters. A twilight zone effect. A good story that holds the reader's interest. Creative and easy to follow. I could relate to but my Doctor wasn't evil. He took care of me. This story holds the reader's interest.

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